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post Jun 8 2008, 08:45 PM
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time moves backwards into a cliff
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Youíre so afraid of failing that you wonít even attempt so succeed,
Letting go of the handle of promise so easily with a trembling hand
Cowardice haunts every inch of your body, having you on your knees
And making you cry tears of despair

In such dense chaos, itís very hard to decipher the meaning of anything

The trial will become more and more aggressive, so be prepared
Life is so uncertain that it hides the exit in such sadness
Look at your pitiful self and decide
If youíll just be a broken person


The predating anguish drives your small soul to hide away in misery
The depression is so great that it seems to swallow you into itself
And it shatters every single joyous thought or memory

But keep your head up and know that in the chaos itís very difficult to
Understand anyone, even yourself

So donít give up at the very start because of doubt
I know your spirit is much stronger than to receive these blows
Because in spite of the surrounding holocaust, you seem to find
A way and rise from the ashes
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post Jun 8 2008, 09:08 PM
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I like this. The opening really dragged you into this.
Twist of tone at the end was a bit sudden but that's alright. smile.gif
Good stuff.


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post Jun 8 2008, 09:32 PM
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Thank you.

This is dedicated to a friend that I hurt badly. I am not sure what will happen...


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It seems so distant, when we smiled and felt happyÖ
I wanted you to remember all the sweet moments that we had shared.
Now, the isolation and time grow denser, and Iím falling behind
And youíre escaping into the unknown

Please donít forget me
Please tell me that youíll miss me
I want to be loved by you
I need you there
I canít go on by myself any longerÖ

Why is reality so cruel to us?
All I can do is go around in circles with the answer eluding me.
I have removed my true self and lied so sweetly, so realistically
And pierced your heart mercilessly

Please, understand why I have hurt you so
Donít turn your back and walk away
I need something to cling on
It feels like the world is spinning out of control

Please, forgive me
Even if Iím ready for rejection
Iím too weak to go on
I canít go on by myself any longer.
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post Jun 8 2008, 10:36 PM
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But you're so supreme!!!
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The first poem is strong and the second one is sad...i really liked both of them.

Hope everything turns alright with your friend


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post Jun 9 2008, 09:16 AM
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I agree with B.V - the first one is really good with a nice twist, and the second one really does seem to be reflected on experience.


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